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w5 Owhi Code Template

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Owhi Lake Project

 


 

Lesson Link

 

Review:

Ask Questions

w5 nice friends ania

 

Connect Ideas

Connections Example


Owhi Lake Poster

 

 

Your poster here


Owhi Lake

 

 

Your description / explanitory paragraph here

 

 

 


 

Wiki Work Directions:

 

Goal: Explain what Owhi Lake looks like to someone who has never seen it. Write organized and elaborated paragraphs with style and word choice. (See rubric below.) Edit the paragraphs.
 
Tasks for Wiki:
Revise paragraph for more detail:
  1. Choose your paragraph from this page  (see section below--You may already have a page listed here; If so, use that page). Delete the other paragraphs.
    1. W5 Owhi Quill
    2. W5 Owhi Ania
    3. w5 Owhi Loudy
    4. W5 Owhi Jane
    5. W5 Owhi Rista
    6. W5 Owhi Rocke
    7. W5 Owhi Ryal
    8. W5 Owhi Rater
    9. W5 Owhi Tiger
    10. W5 Owhi Vinick
    11. W5 Owhi Kimy
    12. W5 Owhi Sager
  2. Revise for organization: ask yourself questions the reader would ask and use connecting words; do not just list ideas
  3. Revise for more detail: description, specific nouns and vivid verbs
  4. Answer the questions-- then revise again (Steps 2 and 3) or evaluate (Step 5) as needed:
    1. Organization: Are all your sentences connected to each other (so your paragraph is not a list)?
    2. Elaboration: Did you include images (sights and sounds; descriptions; 5ws: who, what, when, where, why)?
    3. Word Choice: Did you include strong verbs (action) and precise adjectives/nouns (rainbow trout, Ponderosa pine)?
  5. Rubric and Evaluation 

    Evaluate your paragraph using this rubric:

    1. Organization: How well did you organize your writing, with each sentence in each paragraph linked to each other with connected words or transitions words so your sentences are not simply a list of ideas?   Your score: ________

      1. 4 All my sentences are connected to each other; after I wrote one sentence, the next sentence connected to an idea in the previous sentence. It is not just a list of ideas; you must read them in the order I wrote them

      2. 3 Most of my sentences are connected to each other; it is not just a list of ideas; you must read most of them in order

      3. 2 A few of my sentences are connected, but you can reorder them so they are still just a list of ideas

      4. 1 My sentences are just a list.  You can reorder them in any way.

         

    2. Elaboration: How well did you elaborate your ideas with details to create a mind movie in your readers mind? Your score: _____

      1. 4 All of my sentences contain details of sights and sounds and answered the 5w's so my reader can imagine my picture in their mind; if I included a sentence about an eagle, the next sentence explained more about that eagle.

      2. 3 Most of my sentences contain details of sights and sounds and answered the 5w's so my reader can imagine my picture in their mind; if I included a sentence about an eagle, the next sentence explained more about that eagle.

      3. 2 Some of my sentences contain details of sights and sounds and some answered the 5w's; my reader still asks questions about the ideas I started; I did not include two sentences about each animal

      4. 1 Few of my sentences contain details of sights and sounds and few answered the 5w's; my reader will ask many questions about the ideas I started; I did not include two sentences about each animal 

         

    3. Word Choice: How well did you include strong nouns and verbs as well as specific details so your reader could picture each idea? Did you include specific adjectives/nouns (black bear; sparkling water)  as well as strong verbs (hid, swerved, dove, scurried) ?  Your score: _____

      1. 4 Every sentence contains strong adjectives/nouns and vivid verbs with details so your reader can picture each idea?

      2. 3 Most sentences contains strong adjectives/nouns and vivid verbs with details so your reader can picture each idea?

      3. 2 Some sentences contains strong adjectives/nouns and vivid verbs with details so your reader can picture each idea?

      4. 1 A few sentences contains strong adjectives/nouns and vivid verbs with details so your reader can picture each idea?

  1. Edit-- check for complete sentences, periods, capitals, spelling.

  2. Add your image (Click from the slideshow) to your wiki page (ask for help)

  3. Notify your teacher: Add a link in your Edmodo Assignment.


About Owhi Lake Paragraphs

 

[choose your paragraphs here if your page is not already created]

 

1

It's a bright nippy day at Owhi Lake, and the sun is glistening off the surface of the lake. As you look out you can see the rainbow trout soaring through the air. Dragonflies try to eat the pesky mosquitoes. When you look up into the sky, there isn't one single cloud in the sky. You can also see the red-tailed hawk soaring around in circles. When I look at the trees, I see squirrels clibing up and down to store their nuts. As I continue to stare at the crazy squirrels something small catches my eye in the water. When I look, nothing is there. Then I look around, and I see it again. It's a little tiny baby turtle playing games with me.

Q.

 


2

On a bright morning, a beautiful morning, the light from the flaming hot sun shines on the sparkling water of Owhi Lake. The rainbow trout will shine, their skin will sparkle like a glittering star upon the wide open sky. The big puffy clouds will make you use your imagination. They provide cool soothing shade for the rainbow trout.

A.


3

In a bright sunny day the water flows softly in wind passing by.  The bright rainbow trout swim gently through the shimmering water. The trout doesn't know the bald eagle is looking over him.  Eagles soar through the bright blue sky above the lake. On the ground the bears wander around, lurking for prey. Bears walk during the day looking for food or something to chase. Deer run away from bears so they don't become food. Deer hide in rose bushes eating fresh green grass by buttercups now blooming for two weeks. roses flow with the wind whistling through the fresh green grass.

L.


4.

On a bright sunny day the light from the sun burns over the shiny water with the beautiful rainbow trout. Huckleberry bushes surrounding all of the trees.  Spiders climbing up trees trying to find a place to make their webs.  White tail deer eating lots and lots of strawberries and raspberries. Sunflowers swaying around. Eagles soaring in the sky over th every long trees.

J.


5.

If you've ever "explored" Owhi Lake, you'd find that there are many species of plant life, animals, and be able to learn things amazing facts about Owhi.

One late afternoon in May, when the sky was greyish orange, the eagle took his last soar in the gusty wind.

R.


6. (then)

The rabbit hops around. The mice run through the blooming grass. The mice and rabbit don't know the eagle is up above soaring through the air.  The rabbit hears the eagle coming and starts running through the blooming grass and into a big log. The rabbit comes out to see if the eagle is still up above.

T.


7.

At Owhi Lake the trees nick the sky. The eagle will hunt for mice in the trees. The fish swerve through the water, hoping they won't be consumed by other predators. But a roaming red-tailed hawk spies [is spying] on a trout. The hawk swoops down and scoops up the trout without any other fish knowing. The puny bug scatters the land with the snakes slithering to capture them. The mosquitoes fly and butterflies flutter [are fluttering]. The cougars sprint and the coyotes dash. All the buttercups float around by the animals instant speed. The squirrels squeak and chipmunks squeal. But the one animal everything is unaware of is the mighty, huge, fierce grizzly bear. All the animals prance. One cougar tries the fight but the grizzly's excessive force was too powerful for the poor cougar.

[Note the difference -- these are dead verbs: The cougars were sprinting  and the coyotes were dashing. All the buttercups were floating around by the animals instant speed. The squirrels were squeaking and chipmunks were squealing. ]

R.


8.

Over at Owhi Lake the striped rainbow trout swishes and swirls through the ice cold water while overhead a lime-green frog nips at a big brown mosquito. Suddenly, a slithery and sneaky snake eats the frog in one gulp.


9.

One very warm morning when all the tiny buttercups gloom ath te glazing hot sun, then all the shiny brook trout swim out and eat the mayflies and mosquitoes.  But in the sky a red-tailed hawk was gliding over his morning breakfast, he weeps in and gets a nice, big juicy brook trout. It's the glazing but hot afternoon and a big, fluffy grizzly bear was digging in a campsite garbage, looking for food and then was taking a long afternoon nap.

V.


10.

The sun sparkles over the magnificent Owhi Lake and the eagles soar through the beautiful sunny skies. The chipmunks crawl up and down the trees with acorns.


11.

On a wonderful day on the month of May at Owhi Lake the sky is as beautiful as ever. The sun shines on therainbow trout, and it makes their skin sparkle. The huckleberries pop off the bushes and pine needles fall and f____ off the trees. The crawdads crawl and pinch so it is like OOOUUUUUTTTTCCCCCHHHH! The scary rattle snake slithers on the ground. The red-winged blackbird flyies and sings in the beautiful sky. The hawk squawks.

K.

 

 


 

 

 

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