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Page history last edited by Ms. Edwards 11 years, 6 months ago

Revision

 

re vision

 

see again

 

re-see

 




What is revision?

 

Revision means to look at your writing again --- look at it with fresh eyes to see if you words interesting, clear, precise, focused, and consise.

Are your words:

  • specific and detailed, not general and ordinary
  • images for the reader
  • active
  • ordered and organized
  • fluent -- the words and ideas flow easily from one idea to the next
  • clear
  • focused
  • concise; not too wordy

 

How do I revise?

 

Use the muscles in your ARMS:

 

Add-What else do I need to include? Can I add a more descriptive verb? Can I add a simile? alliteration? consonance? imagery?

 

Remove-Can I leave out any unnecessary words like of and the? Is there a line that doesn't fit? Can I use fewer, more concise words?

 

Move-Is the information in the most logical place? Do I need to change my line breaks? Are me sentences and paragraphs flowing easily from one idea to the next? Do I need transitions?

 

Substitute-What words could be replaced with clearer, stronger words? Nifty nouns and Vivid Verbs: ACTION and ACTIVE

 

Writers are masters of word power with ARMS using figurative language.  Review our strategies:

 

Poetry Techniques

Figurative Language

 


What are the strategies?

 

ARMS Examples:

 

Add: Click here:  Revision Add 1  Revision Add 2  Revision Add 3

Remove: Click here.  Revision Remove

Move: Click here. Revision Move   Connections Example

Substitute: Click here. Revision Substitute

 

Revision Tips 1

 

For quick revision, use the Names, Action, and Senses (imagery).  Click here for directions.

 

Revision Tips 2

 

For more thorough revision, use Names, Action, Imagery, showing, cut clutter, figurative language, etc.  For directions, click here.

 

Figurative Language

 

Click here:

Poetry Techniques

Figurative Language

 

For lessons and quizes on figurative language, click Mrs. Dowling's links here.

 

Sample Revision

 

To view a step by step revision of a short essay, click here.

 


 

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