Student Strong Verb Paragraphs and Phrases

Please share your strong verb choices here:

Phrases

What strong verbs have you revised lately?  Please share your revisions and thinking in this table.

Paragraphs

Please paste your revised paragraph here, followed by a brief summary of the words you succeeded in choosing well, and how you thought of that choice.

6W

Here's another paragraph from 6W:

Slam Miss

I aim with my hand to slam-dunk the ball. I jump five feet in the air and dunked from half court. I sprinted down the  middle and tripped, jumped up, and sprinted to the hoop to dunk it. When I first dunked, I missed.

Explanation:

The underlined words show strong word choice in verbs.  I SHOWED you what I did; I didn't just tell you.  I chose ACTION words! I dunked, tripped, jumped.  You can SEE it in your mind, can't you?

5W

Another strong verb paragraph from 5W:

High Hitter

Barry prepares for his turn at bat for the Red Sox. He trudges out of the dugout and waves at the crowd. The crowd cheers. “Yay!” The opposing team boos. “Booo!” He swings his bat in the air as if hitting the ball. He practices three times imagining he hits three home runs. Three players stand on the field at each base. He steps up to the plate and knocks the dust off his shoes with the bat. The pitcher throws a fast ball. Crack! Barry busts the ball and the bat breaks. All players sprinted home with long strides. Barry slides as the umpire yells, “Safe!”  The game is won.

Explanation:

The underlined words show strong word choice in verbs.  I SHOWED you what Barry did.  I chose ACTION words! I choose waves, cheers, slides.  You can SEE Barry in your mind dusting off his shoes with his bat or sliding into home. I did not tell you, "Barry made a grand slam." Instead, I showed you HOW he did it.