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Similarities

 

Prewrite:

 

 

What is the same?

 

Obama and McCain want: healthcare, a strategy in Iraq, lower taxes, alternative energy, help for the economy

Transitions I could use:

 

Write Source 2000 106

 

likewise, as, in the same way, like, also, similarly, both

 

Draft paragraph----

Goal: facts, details, strong verbs

 

8 sentences:  Topic Sentence, Idea Sentence+Detail Sentence (3X for Six Sentences) Concluding Sentence

 

John McCain and Barack Obama both desire to provide for American citizen's well-being.  First of all, each candidate created a strategy for healthcare for Americans. Both want more coverage. Likewise, each candidate wants to mend the mortgage problem in the economy.  They do not want families to lose their homes. Similarly, a new tax plan would help the economy and families; Obama as well as McCain want to lower taxes for the middle income citizens. In the same way, to help families, the economy, and America, both  candidates encourage the use of alternative energy with wind and solar programs. Finally, both campaigns speak of certain strategies for our War in Iraq to protect the future of American. Although the candidates agree on the importance of these issues, each person promotes a different solution for each of these issues.

 

Revision 1:

 

John McCain and Barack Obama both desire to provide for American citizen's well-being.  First of all, each candidate created a strategy for healthcare for Americans. Both want more coverage. Likewise, each candidate wants to mend the mortgage problem in the economy.  They do not want families to lose their homes. Similarly, a new tax plan would help the economy and families; Obama as well as McCain want to lower taxes for the middle income citizens. In the same way, to help families, the economy, and America, both  candidates encourage the use of alternative energy with wind and solar programs. Dependence on oil is a problem that must be solved for the success of American life. Finally, both campaigns speak of certain strategies for our War in Iraq to protect the future of American. The Iraq War is an economic, security, and human problem. Although the candidates agree on the importance of these issues, each person promotes a different solution for each of these issues.

 


Differences

 

Prewrite

 

McCain: Lower taxes for all; lower taxes for business; alternative energy also includes 45 nuclear power plants; more troops to Iraq to keep security to rebuild Iraq; healthcare insurance companies to fix problem

 

Transitions:

 

but, still, although, on the other hand, however, yet, otherwise, even though, in constrast

 

Draft:

Goal: facts, details, strong verbs

 

8 sentences:  Topic Sentence, Idea Sentence+Detail Sentence (3X for Six Sentences) Concluding Sentence

 

 

Although Obama and MCain agree that American has problems to solve, both candidates have different solutions.  Even though both want lower taxes, McCain would lower taxes for everyone, including businesses.  He believes that low taxes will encourage business to keep jobs in the United States.  My question: has that strategy worked yet? Even though both candidates want healthcare coverage, McCain expects the insurance companies to fix the problem. He does not want government regulations or involvement. On alternative energy, McCain would invest in solar, wind, and drilling on our coasts. Still, I wonder if drilling will help us now.  In addition, he also would build forty-five new nuclear power plants.  How will we know these are safe?  What technology has improved?  For the economy, McCain wants to help with the mortgage companies to help families.  This may be a good idea, but would it really help?  On another issue, and in contrast to Obama, McCain  would add more troops into Iraq.  He believes we need to add troops to create security to help rebuild that country.  As you can see, McCain has a clear plan for America; what is the Obama's plan?

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