Revision - to re-vision or re-see your work.

Read your work over several times, each time for a different focus.

First read to find words that could be more specific: nouns.

Second, read to find words that could be more active: verbs.

Third, read to add details: sensory, 5Ws, 5Es

Revision Tips 1:

1.  Names

Reread your draft.  Look for nouns you can more specifically name.

Examples

Nouns:

A woman = Mrs. Singer

The floor  == the smooth tweed carpet

The desk == the metal and yellow plastic desk with attached seat

Stuff  in my purse =  pens, pencils, coins,  paper clips, lipstick, comb

A man ==  a tall, chunky 50 year old salesman

2. Action Verbs

Eliminate linking and helping verbs (is, am, are, were, was, become) and boring verbs (take, took, ran, run, give, like, love).

Examples

Run = sprint, jog, glide

Walk = amble, saunter

Take = grab

Was pushing = pushed

Is staying = stayed

Look through your Eliminate Dead Verbs packet.

3. Details (Senses; 5Ws, 5Es)

Use details to explain what is seen, touched, smelled, tasted, heard, etc.

“Mrs. Sanchez, her frizzy hair tied up in a messy ponytail and a hairy mole right between her stuffy eyebrows”